Definition paragraph is about “Tingkaben”
Step
1
What
is Tingkaben?
How
to procession of Tingkaben?
Why
do you think Tingkaben different with other culture?
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2
Topic
Sentence : Tradition Tingkaben is traditional ceremony salvation to the unborn
baby aged seven months in Central Kalimantan.
Supporting
Sentence : This culture is appear when there is a married couple birth nine
times but none of them alive.
Concluding
Sentence : In conclusion, Tradition Tingkaben is a gratitude to Allah SWT above
gave child who healthy.
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First
Draft
“Tingkaben”
Tradition Tingkaben is traditional
ceremony salvation to the unborn baby aged seven months in Central Kalimantan.
It usually at call “ Seven Monthly” in society. This culture is appear when
there is a married couple birth nine times but none of them alive. And then how
to procession of Tingkaben? First, spray carried by elders and husband with
read Al-fatihah, Al-ikhlas, Al-falaq, An-nas 3x and ayat kursi 7x. Secondly, replace
clothing ceremony conducted by the type of fabric as much as 7 pieces
with different motifs to wear choose the best in the hope that one day
the baby also has the virtues implicit in the
symbol of the fabric. Next, the feast as a celebration,
there some offerings which usually need to be prepared. Finally, the ceremony dragged mat for the fist time out of the house, it has
the intention that easy baby in the birth. Why do you think Tingkaben different
with other culture? Because only exist
when the women is pregnant 7 monthly and different the step with other culture.
In conclusion, Tradition Tingkaben is a gratitude to Allah SWT above gave
child who healthy.
the
type of fabric : Various fabric
7
pieces different motifs : 7 kind different motifs
the
virtues implicit : goodness implicit
the
feast as a celebration : gratitude celebration
dragged
mat : Attractive mat
strange word should be explain to familiar word and make a strange word, don't make a strange sentence.
BalasHapusPlease edit your strange word!
Nurul i think in the first sentences you can delete the word "Tradition" because the word its same means with traditional. so, you can delete to make a simple sentences like "Tingkaben is traditional ceremony salvation to the unborn baby aged seven months in Central Kalimantan".
BalasHapusin the second sentence you can change "it was called"
I think you shouldn't add the step, i must be your draft.
BalasHapusThe first sentence, i am absolutely agree with Hasti. Your second sentence, it can be "It was called Seventh Monthly ceremony in general". I don't understand about the third sentence. you wrote "This culture is appear when...." do you know what the meaning of this sentence? I think you will describe about the history, because you used "appear". if you want to explain about how the ceremony happen, just use "Happen". still the third, check your grammar, please. Pay attention with the tenses.
Why are you write 3x and 7x? It should be write with latter and it will be three time and seven time. Secondly? You wrote "first" at the first supporting sentence(SS), so you must be write "second" not secondly.
About your third SS, there is no information there. you should make it clearly. And the last, about the strange word. i am sure that you know the guideline, that is "Strange Words" not strange sentences. You have to keep focus with the rules.
I think you shouldn't add the step, it must be your draft.
BalasHapus