Tanjung Puting National Park
One
of the places to visit in Central Kalimantan is Tanjung Puting National Park. It has some of the most interest places,there are: You will see
the orang utans a lot of ex captive orang utans rehabilitation in the park. The
romantic forest, river and atmosphere of the park are also offer different
experiences especially for those who want to have an adventurous honeymoon. In
there,many flora and fauna. There are Ramin,Jelatung,Kayu besi,Meranti and
Keruing. Furthermore,the list fauna are Orang Utan,Proboscis Monkeys,Grey
Gibbon and Malayan Sun Bear. Places to visit there: Camp Leakey,Tanjung Harapan
and Pondok Tanguy. There are places which must be to visit because its
very interest and beautiful places.
Your paragraph will looks interesting if you edit it with justify. In a paragraph, you must add a complete sentences not a list sentences and you should use a good structure or good grammar that can make otherpeople understand about your paragraph.In the concluding sentence, i think it's not good concluding sentence. May be you can use, "In conclusion, Tanjung Puting Nasional Park is a beautiful and interest place to visit".
BalasHapusI suggest you to edit your paragraph in justify, it is better than before. Do you remember about the features of a paragraph ? I think you know about it. Let's discuss it to remind you. One of the features of a paragraph is the last sentence or concluding sentence, brings the paragraph to a logical conclusion. The concluding sentence states the main point point afain or summaries the main idea of the paragraph. In addition, it can a suggestion, an opinion, or an prediction. Sometimes we use end of paragraph signals as follows : in conclusion, in summary, in brief, to conclude, etc. I think for your concluding sentence you can use " In conclusion, Tanjung Puting National Park are interesting and beautiful places to visit in Central Kalimantan". A good paragraph should have unity and coherence. It is can to helps the reader understand the paragraph.
BalasHapusi agree with Ein and Wahyu with their suggest above, you have to make the margin of your paragraph to be justify, it will make your paragraph looks neat.And make your concluding sentence better. it's must brings the paragraph to a logical conclusion and don't forget the concluding sentence states the main point like Wahyu said above. The last, please put space between coma and the word are you use after coma.
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